Board Peer

I need to response to her and ask these questions George’s audience would be his teacher named Mr. Smith, because  that is the person whom he is writing the message to. The purpose of his message to his teacher, is to reach out to him for help with a certain assignment.  The first thing that George could have done was,  be more specific on which assignment he was referring to when asking for help.  Another thing George could try changing would be the use of bold letters and all capital letters because this could make the teacher feel as if he is being demanding and yelling at him to get his point across.  He also  stated that no one could keep him from being successful in life, which is great, but that had nothing to do with the teacher personally.  The teacher is there to help so Georges approach seemed as if he were taking his frustrations out on Mr. Smith.  This would  definitely be a case of  including unnecessary information.  He could improve his tone by not using bold or all capital letters, for this may come off as being aggressive. .  If George makes these few adjustments that i stated , this will help the teacher understand his question better and help him with a more  precise resolution.  How might George better express his purpose (for example, is he missing information that should be included or did he include information that is unnecessary)? How might George better connect with his audience? How might George improve his tone? Are there grammar or spelling errors that George could fix?