The Indiana Admission

This is Indiana admission essay question: Describe your academic and career plans and any special interest (for example, undergraduate research, academic interests, leadership opportunities, etc.) that you are eager to pursue as an undergraduate at Indiana University. Also, if you encountered any unusual circumstances, challenges, or obstacles in pursuit of your education, share those experiences and how you overcame them. And this is the one that needs rewriting: My main career plan is to take a four-year biology major and from there start going to medical school to pursue my education in being a dentist or my second plan would be a Veterinary Doctor because I worked in an animal hospital for a year, gaining experience of how the fieldwork in real life so I think that would be my second choice if being a dentist did not work out for me. I do have a lot of interest other than being a dentist or DVM; one of them is social networking, economics, and leadership, as I have used to be a leader through directing friends, teammates, and colleagues on what to do. My interest is to make people find what they want. Along the way, I have faced obstacles like working almost full time and keeping up with my school homework, tests, and projects. Another one is moving from Egypt to the United States because I wanted to be in a better education but most importantly is to be near my brother who graduated from Indiana state university. I always wanted to challenge myself to see what I can do. I hope that by being here at Indiana University, I would pursue my education at another level.